Are you talking about omitting the Nihilus attacking Sion segment? I felt that wasn't necessary. Instead I chose to focus on the fact that Darth Traya is still alive. Well, tried to.
That is a great point. I'd been kind of stuck on what to do with establishing shots, but now that you mention it, it makes sense to take a little time to let the user visually see what's all going on. A few pauses in the conversation would go a long way as well.
They aren't terribly close to one another. I think the angle I used makes them look a little cramped though, can probably change that.
I'm still experimenting with Visas' role in this scene.
Originally, I had Sion respond to her, but it seemed out of place.
A simple thing to do would be to show her lightsaber power off at least. Maybe that's the route to take.
I think whether or not I will use a hard cut or a fade out depends on the final music selection. This set a more somber tone for the scene, so I could see how using a fade would be better. If I decide to go for menacing, the hard cut is probably better.
This is good feedback though. I have more to think on as I continue to build up the scene.