As far as the camera is concerned, I think it does add a level of eery anticipation to the scene.
The floating camera gives it an ethereal quality & it cues the audience into something being wrong before any dialogue is spoken.
I do understand the frustration with the camera movement, but there's something atmospheric I love about build up it creates, especially combined with the music. Something that might fix it would be if instead of the stiff movements, the camera was instead slowly rotating towards the cockpit throughout the movement?
So you start with the camera in the same spot & it begins moving along the same path, but instead of jerky, stop\start, it would instead gracefully ease along the path, rotating until it eventually settles on the map panel. It's a bit hard to describer without showing, but I hope that the general idea has been communicated.
In any case, I think the scene is better with it than not, personally.